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原文分析

• 语法与时态：原文在时态上存在轻微不一致（如“was built”与“we extend”并列）；学术写作中通常用过去时描述方法与结果，用现在时陈述研究目的或一般性结论。
• 专业术语与搭配：
  • “theory of planned behavior”应大写为“Theory of Planned Behavior”。
  • “heavy night users”搭配不够自然，学术文本中更常用“heavy nighttime users”或明确“social media users”。
  • “longer latency”表达不够精准，睡眠研究更常用“sleep-onset latency”。
  • “controlling for”可替换为“adjusting for”，更符合统计报告习惯。
• 用词与风格：
  • “questionnaires”更准确的表达为“questionnaire responses”。
  • “helpful”偏口语，可换为“beneficial”或通过结构调整体现。
  • “run a longitudinal cohort”建议改为“conduct a longitudinal cohort study”，更正式。
  • “consider objective actigraphy”可改为“incorporate objective actigraphy”，表达更明确。
• 结构与流畅度：整体清晰，但个别句子可通过名词化或并列结构优化衔接与学术正式度。

修正版本 This paper examines how social media use affects adolescents’ sleep. We collected 1,204 questionnaire responses between March and May 2024 from three urban middle schools. Our model was grounded in the Theory of Planned Behavior, which we extended by incorporating bedtime procrastination. Results indicated that heavy nighttime users had 27% higher odds of short sleep after adjusting for age, gender, and device ownership. A plausible mechanism is that exposure to high-arousal content lengthens sleep-onset latency and fragments sleep. Practical implications include implementing school-based digital hygiene education and fostering parental co-regulation. Limitations include the cross-sectional design and reliance on self-reported measures. In future work, we will conduct a longitudinal cohort study and incorporate objective actigraphy.

修改说明

• 将“was built on the theory of planned behavior and we extend it by adding bedtime procrastination”改为“Our model was grounded in the Theory of Planned Behavior, which we extended by incorporating bedtime procrastination.”
  • 统一过去时态以匹配方法描述；专有名词大写；将“adding”替换为“incorporating”提升学术正式度；用定语从句改善衔接。
• 将“heavy night users”改为“heavy nighttime users”
  • 符合常见学术搭配，语义更自然。
• 将“controlling for”改为“adjusting for”
  • 更符合统计报告的标准用语。
• 将“higher odds of short sleep”保留，但将谓语与时态调整为“Results indicated that … had …”
  • 与“Results”搭配使用过去时，更符合惯例；保持逻辑回归表述的准确性。
• 将“The mechanism may be that high-arousal content causes longer latency and fragmented sleep.”改为“A plausible mechanism is that exposure to high-arousal content lengthens sleep-onset latency and fragments sleep.”
  • 用“plausible mechanism”增强学术表达；“exposure to”更精确；“sleep-onset latency”是标准术语；动词“lengthens”“fragments”更凝练。
• 将“Practical implications are that … could be helpful.”改为“Practical implications include implementing … and fostering …”
  • 避免口语化“helpful”；以名词化结构提升正式度和可操作性。
• 将“questionnaires”改为“questionnaire responses”
  • 更准确指代收集到的应答而非空白问卷。
• 将“Limitations include the cross-sectional design and self-reported measures.”保留并微调后文结构
  • 增加“reliance on”使表达更地道。
• 将“In future work, we will run a longitudinal cohort and consider objective actigraphy.”改为“we will conduct a longitudinal cohort study and incorporate objective actigraphy.”
  • “conduct”与“study”更正式；“incorporate”比“consider”更明确地表达研究计划。

改进建议

• 时态一致性：描述方法与结果用过去时；阐述研究目的、普遍结论或意义时用现在时。
• 专有名词与术语：保持理论名称大写（如“Theory of Planned Behavior”）；睡眠领域使用标准术语（如“sleep-onset latency”）。
• 统计表述：使用“adjusting for”或“controlling for”时与模型类型匹配；“odds”用于逻辑回归结果，注意单位百分比表述的一致性。
• 风格与正式度：尽量避免口语化词汇（如“helpful”），优先使用名词化结构（implications include…）和明确的学术动词（incorporate, extend, indicate）。
• 精确性：关于样本与工具，优先使用“responses”“administered/collected”等精确表述，避免潜在歧义。